一、句子之间缺少过渡性的单词或词组

① Salmons swim upstream, they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.

② Salmons swim upstream, and then they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.

二、省字号(')的滥用

① the government's plan

② the plan of the government

三、代词之间的性、数、格不一致

① Everyone has their homework.

② Everyone has his (or her) homework.

四、主句与从句的顺序不当

① Some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over, after the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds.

② After the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds, some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over.

五、双重否定

① Barely no one noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.

② Barely anyone noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.

六、修饰语、插入语的位置不当

① The forest fire, no longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters, jumped the firebreak.

② No longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters, the forest fire jumped the firebreak.

七、意义含糊的先行词

① The band members collected his and her uniforms.

② The band members collected their uniforms.

八、介词和冠词的滥用

① The project of the government reduces the costs of production of the private firms.

② The government project reduces the production costs of private firms.

九、句子缺少成分

① When aiming for the highest returns, and also thinking about the possible losses.

② When aiming for the highest returns, investors also should think about the possible losses.

十、忘记断句

① I do not recall what kind of printer it was all I remember is that it could sort, staple, and print a packet at the same time.

② I do not recall what kind of printer it was. All I remember is that it could sort, staple, and print a packet at the same time.